Talk:CP 02906/en

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Suggestions...

"only out of retrospective curiosity" -> "other than out of respective curiosity"?

  • We believed that "retrospective curiosity" makes sense in English and reflects the meaning of the original (Nstrole)

"I thank you infinitely" -> "Thank you very much"?

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"steam treatments" -> "fumigations"

  • We decided to go with "steam treatments" to make it clear that he was talking about his own medical treatments (Nstrole)

"live with friends" -> "stay with friends"

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"Clement-Tonnerres" -> "Clermont-Tonnerres"

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"and so I could benefit" -> "and then I could benefit"

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"frighten me" -> "terrify me"?

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"do you not find, does he not find that it is impossible for him to go back" -> "don't you think, and doesn't he think that it would be impossible for him to go back"?

  • We belived that we should stay as close to the original here instead of trying to smooth over the language to reflect Proust's writing process (Nstrole)

"alpine hunters" -> "Alpine soldiers"

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"how would I say" -> "how can I put it"?

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"You would understand me very badly if you believed that I am intending to renounce in any way a being who seems entirely delicate" -> "You would misunderstand me totally if you believed that I am intending to renounce in any way a creature who seems so utterly sensitive"?

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"But I mean that I know little of him and only for a short time" -> "But what I mean is that I have only known him for a short time and not very well"?

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Note 8 "important forces" -> "heavy forces"

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"evacuate the team" -> "disengage"?

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"due to the wind" -> "because of the mist"

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"advancement" -> "ascent"

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"The battles to reclaim the summit of Hartmannswillerkopf lasted from January to June 1915, and the resulting war did not end until 1918 as each army occupied a part of higher ground." -> "The battles to reclaim the summit of Hartmannswillerkopf lasted from January to June 1915, and the fighting over positions that resulted from it (each army occupying one part of the heights) continued until 1918."?

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Need to add Contributor.

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